English - 2020 creative writing L1 - Post writing

Showing setting via a narrator personal POV
She ate her tanghulu marshmallows very gracefully, and the crackling sound that made when her teeth came in contact through the marshmallows were very exquisite. To finish her snack off she decided to hydrate herself with a fresh iced glass of 7 up.

The young lady gracefully ate her tanghulu / candied marshmallows and the amazement on her friends face when she could hear how detailed the chewing was, almost as if she was wearing a microphone. She moved on for her chocolate cover whipped cream that spent 1 hour in the freezer and candied strawberries. The flavours the young lady had on her taste buds were immaculate. The texture was something else though, marshmallows have a fluffy, smooth texture to it, but with the flavour of the candied sugar gave the crush and the texture hit different as well. Now she has moved on towards the candied strawberries, and the way her teeth hit the candied strawberries was a satisfaction to hear to the ear-drums. The flavour this time was different, because some strawberries, but not all have a hit of sourness to it, but not the uncomfortable kind, it was like the sour candy you have throughout your childhood, But the sweetness of the candied gave you the idea that you were tasting those golden brown crunchy sweets that you put whipped cream into or the inside of a meringue.  . The froze whipped cream was something else though, the texture was different this time because it was a soft but rough at the same time, and when you swallowed it it left a cool, moisture satisfaction in the inside of your mouth and throat. The chocolate though when it was combined together was exquisite. The chocolate was coated on lightly, but not too lightly that you couldn't taste or the cocoa or feel the texture of the crisps. The young lady quickly finished up deciding to hydrate herself with store bought lemonade(but no fizz) combined with cool sparkling water. 

Learn how to describe setting to deepen a mood
When the headmaster walked down those stairs it was as if there had been a spotlight placed above her. .......It was dead quiet, the only sound that was possible to be heard was the very footsteps the headmaster took with the clicking noises of her heels every step she took.

Figurative language for the sense of sight