One day a little girl with bright brown hair and beautiful brown eyes was walking down a oak tree forest.The little girl stopped at deep wishing well trying to grab a wooden pail of water when a see through ghost with stars sparkling all over it had approached the girl.The moon disappeared out of the night sky.She was without her family and friends.It was pitch black with only stars shining in the sky.
The little girl was on her own with no one to be spooked with.The ghost approached the girl again as if he was trying to transfer a message or trying to tell the girl a note like he was trying to give the girl a hand.She was frightened with no one’s hand to squeeze.She felt like it was the last night of her life.Instead of the ghost hurting her he helped her grab the bucket and thought to herself: there is always a good side to everyone.
She said to herself in her mind he doesn’t even look scary in fact he look’s like he would like to be my friend.
I like you make it into a paragraph.
ReplyDeleteI don't like that you use little girl gave her a name.
i liked how you used paragraphs in your storie
ReplyDeletenext time u should use discreditably words